1dering at stars

Even if it could use some work, I think it's a good thing you wrote it. It helps sometimes to write, even if its just for yourself, no one has ...

You, whose life is coaxed from lies, Shifting shadows in the dark What do you see without your eyes? A limbless beast, a wingless lark You, with candle Hope ‘pon ...

This is good, though some sentences are a little repetitive, they could be condensed into one sentence, and it would be more affective. Altogether, I think its really good. Its ...

I think that this is good... although it certainly is very disturbing, but that's fine if it's what you wanted. The line you underlined is fine. Maybe change, they all ...

Not at all. Thanks for the comment, I think you're right about those two lines... I'm new and don't really know much about this, If you have any suggestions it ...

Last night I danced on the treetops; With silver slippers of dew, We whirled and twirled as moonlight unfurled, To the nightingale’s honey-glazed coo And I dreamed that I was ...

Oh, set the world before my feet But show me not a path Light not my way Apollo’s fleet Brightness though thou hath Give me no sword to wield in ...